I haven´t touched a pen since the 365 daily challenge
Hello, I finally got around half an hour of peace around here, I have not written or done anything in 3 months, so I went with stream of conscious when I wrote my first verse in 2013. so here it is, no title or anything:
Strangled,
Choking
Almost overdosin
Out of breath,
commotion
With the boredom i´m enrolled with
Poetry in motion is at standstill, force it
Waiting for another day that moves ,in orbit
Breathe with the hill sides
The mill mold the minds,
or at times
Forcing mine to draw the lines
And call the strike to brawl with rhymes
And cause the rise of riots, over nusery chrymes
Im both cursed
and blessed
From birth til death
But my poker face will scream check mate
When you question all the breaths I take
Or question all the moves I make
And question what i really make
I make minds grow beyond my own
I make potions and serve em from my own home
I make questions I can´t answer on my own
So you can debate em when I´m long gone
I make flowers blossom
With a carving at the bottom
I saved a thousand roses, they where starving when I got em
I have changed my ways to make them happy
So I can make my bed and starve the nutrition that i´m lacking
Like it a lot. Has a very enjoyable rhythm.
Thank you:)
Powerful
Been a long time since I last screamed while writing a poem. So yeah powerful is a good word
Great flow! Could hear the rhythm perfectly in my head.
Woul be interesting to hear you read it, to see how you flow with it.mand thank you
Love it!
Thank you! Felt good to Get it off my chest. That it is of Your likings too, feels good to
… wonderful reboot for 2013. Best wishes for another poetic year.
Thank you Jamie
excellent…it sparked me.
Thank you!
I liked the rhythm, as others have said, but I also liked the rawness and the freedom of the flow.
Yeah – the flow was good.
Loved the ppiece- thanks- good morning read
I truly like the way you simply set your stream of consciousness free on the page. Such a powerful flow of thoughts and emotion allowing the reader a glimpse into your world. Thank you for that.
Stephen (Stoic)
You are welcome Stephen! Hope you enjoyed it in my world
i like your style and flow 🙂
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thanks again 🙂
This is awesome. I’m into spoken word, and I found myself almost rapping this poem in my head as I read it.
I would love to hear you perform it:)
man I just listened to your performance of it, must have missed it the first time through. You do an awesome job. There’s that one run towards the beginning that’s so fun to ride
Thanx. No you did not miss it earlier i recorded the video 2 hours ago:) then i just edited it in. It would be fun to see others perform it as well:) hint hint. Again thank you for the kind words
great rhythms and images. thanks for visiting my blog.
Yep, just put it out there. Loved it.
Very good poem. I really like the flow.
Also, thank you very much for the follow. 🙂 I followed you back as well.
Worth waiting for. Nice job.
The video is Attached!
I love the lines about the roses; that really hit me.
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I loved your words and the video
I also liked the line about the roses
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Super cool work, and thank you for stopping by my pages. Pinks @)
Like it alot. Have you ever read The Rose that Grew From Concrete by Tupac? http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/the-rose-that-grew-from-concrete-2/
No I hadn´t up until now, i liked that poem a lot , he was a man with words as well as many other rappers out there
Strong work/ Good rhythm. Keep writing. Thanks for stopping by and following my blog.
nursery chrymes! love it.
Wow, this poem is strong and very heart felt. A great verse to start the new year… 🙂
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Great rhythm. good start to 2013.
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Like it! A lot of energy behind your verses. Especially liked “nusery chrymes”. Oh, and thanks for the like and follow on my blog. Would love to hear about Norway.
Well whenever you have time I can tell you plenty:)
Totally awesome…your cadence and word play very clever and creative. GREAT piece
Boy that photo really jumps out at you, and so does the poem. Thanks for following my blog…..If you want put some of your metaphors or metaphorical pictures up here https://www.facebook.com/PowerofMetaphor Have a great day.
Great piece MesAyah
Great piece: tiny suggestion to keep the flow: take the words from line 6, “enrolled with” & swap with “rolling on,” Keeps the same idea, but plays with the motion & keeps the rhyme flow you’ve started. Keep writing I enjoyed reading this!
Awesome poem it flowed very well and was a great 2013 first poem hope to read more by you soon I gave it 5 stars and it was worth every one the form was brilliant.
Thank you!
Hi, I’m more of the metal music, but I liked your style, it’s fluid … yeah, I liked it.
I love my metal every now and then as well, so it is never about genre. Its all about the emotions and feelings. Glad i reached out to you
I adore these lines:
The mill mold the minds,
or at times
Forcing mine to draw the lines
And call the strike to brawl with rhymes
And cause the rise of riots, over nursery chrymes.
Amazing.
Thank you Susan:)
so happy you enjoyed those. Some lines just strikes you when you sit and write, those lines here are like that. I sat there with the beginning and in 5-10 seconds the sheet was filled with them, and they flow naturally because of it:)
and welcome to the site, I appreciate new fans:)
Thanks for following my blog! Great lyrics “First Poem In 2013”- keep representing! 🙂
You have a nice rhythm going there!
Thanks for choosing to follow one of my blogs. I hope you continue to enjoy the posts.
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Powerful! I liked it. Thank you for following my blog 🙂
No problem:) glad you liked it:)
I was trying to read this like a poem but ended up almost humming it. Great flow and rhythm. Keep up the good work.
I agree with others, great rhythm. But I found your choice of words even more interesting and powerful.
This poem reminds me of Jack Kerouac “Mexico City Blues”
WOW, if that is not a compliment, nothing is:) bows in gratitude
Hi,
First, thank you for visiting one of my blogs.
Second, I love your poem. I read it first and then looked at the video recital. You are good and it was nice to hear you bellow out the words from your heart.
All the best.
Ciao,
Pat
Hi Pat
Then you did it in the order I wanted you to:) first create your own images, then listen to mine:)
Thank you for your kind words
I like this very much…the flow is soothing
thank you:)
I can relate to that.
Thanks for following my blog.
All valid points in the starred universal sky.
I’ve bookmarked your place.
Thanks for trading poetry.
Love the short lines. Good stuff!
Thanks for following my blog. I’m pretty new to the blog world, and am loving the fact that I can just discover gems like this. Good work 🙂
Impressive rhythm and rhyme for only being a stream of consciousness piece. I think my favorite line is ‘The mill mold the minds’ – love all the ms and ls.
Great beat – you got my soul dancing.
My fav is – leaving something to be remebered for even after long gone – Legendary
Keep the filling your ink…
The poem though has no title, it speaks volumes.
Thanks for following my blog, I too am following yours with immediate effect.
They say that poetry should burst from one’s chest like a river, your madness is beyond redemption, Keep it up, the force in your poetry is superb, I dare you to give us more of this kind this year. Thanks. Keep the talent burning.
I can only hope and try to give you more of these, if I keep on catching moments , there will be more. And I am honored by you kind words about this poem. Warms my heart to say the least
Brings back memories…
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I litterally Love you guys. 77 comments and 170 likes. warms my heart to have readers like you guys. WOW. I am performing this for the first time live on Thursday during World Poetry day. Hope Norway is ready for it
Have to tap fingers while reading whatever you write. This one is no exception…
“I make minds grow beyond my own
I make potions and serve em from my own home
I make questions I can´t answer on my own”
Best lines from your art. I love that you perform about life and not just ‘your life’ life so many others. Thank you for this!
Thank you for following my blog, I appreciate the interest.
Interesting poem showing a lot of passion. Good luck with your blog.
Janice Spina
I raise a beer to your poem, much much enjoyed. Cheers man!
Cheers my good man!
Excellent rhythm and prose, very profound. Thanks for sharing!
Thanks for the follow, there is much that I can learn by reading your poetry. You see I’m oldman with little education who has just found poetry.